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Message de martinm posté le 06-06-2018 à 20:12:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je dois écrire un petit texte par rapport aux avantages et désavantages de la vie quand on est un ancien. Pourriez-vous me dire si j’ai faitquelques des fautes s’il vous plait, et me donner quelques idées pour enchaîner mieux mes phrases ?
Merci d’avance pour vos réponses.
Old age may be the best time to sit back and enjoy your life. When you are old, your kids have already left home, so you have the freedom to do all things you want to do.
The most important advantage of the old age is that you don’t have many responsibilities as when you are young, consequently you can be relaxed, and you can enjoy your life. It may you will be able to travel around or to do somethings that before you have never done because you didn’t have free time.
The main disadvantage of the old age is that it might you have health, so you won’t be able to enjoy your old life.
Taking everything into account, you should take care your health when you are young, in this way you will be able to enjoy your old age. I strongly believe old age is a good time to spend time with your family and to do somethings that you have never done.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-06-2018 21:42
Message de martinm posté le 06-06-2018 à 20:12:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je dois écrire un petit texte par rapport aux avantages et désavantages de la vie quand on est un ancien. Pourriez-vous me dire si j’ai fait
Merci d’avance pour vos réponses.
Old age may be the best time to sit back and enjoy your life. When you are old, your kids have already left home, so you have the freedom to do all things you want to do.
The most important advantage of the old age is that you don’t have many responsibilities as when you are young, consequently you can be relaxed, and you can enjoy your life. It may you will be able to travel around or to do somethings that before you have never done because you didn’t have free time.
The main disadvantage of the old age is that it might you have health, so you won’t be able to enjoy your old life.
Taking everything into account, you should take care your health when you are young, in this way you will be able to enjoy your old age. I strongly believe old age is a good time to spend time with your family and to do somethings that you have never done.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-06-2018 21:42
Réponse : Old age/aide de here4u, postée le 07-06-2018 à 09:32:55 (S | E)
Hello!
Old age may be the best time to sit back and enjoy your life. (
) When you are old, your kids have already left home, so you have the freedom to do all XXX things you want to do.The most important advantage of the old age is that you don’t have as many responsibilities as when you are young, consequently you can be relaxed, and you can enjoy your life. It may you will be able(mauvaise construction du modal) to travel around or to do somethings that before you have never donegrammaire - construction + temps) because you didn’t have free time.
The main disadvantage of the old age is that it might you have health, so you won’t be able to enjoy your old life(très mal dit!).
Taking everything into account, you should take care OF your health when you are young, in this way you will be able to enjoy your old age. I strongly believe old age is a good time to spend time with your family and to do someXXX things that you have never done.
Une étrange conception de "old age" qu'il conviendrait, d'ailleurs, de "définir" et préciser. Revoir les constructions modales : il se peut qu'il entre = he may come in ...
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