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Message de popol78 posté le 02-06-2008 à 19:34:49 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
Ce serait super génial si l'on pouvait me dire ce qui ne va pas :
SUMMER JOB REQUEST
Dear Madam, sir,
With reference to your advertisement placed in … on… (date: exemple; 22nd November), I would like to apply for the position of…
I wish to apply for the post of…(intitulé du poste) as advertised in…(publication) of…(date)
I am a 22 year old student in technical skills and I am currently looking for a summer job in the UK from June 25th through August 25 th, 2008.
Mastering the English language and soaking up your culture are the principal reasons which motivate me to work with your company also I am registered in a university for an international commercial First degree.
From my experience on summer job, I have learned that a friendly contact near people and team work are very important
I am conscientious, methodical, very flexible, punctual and would consider any position you may offer me.
I would be delighted to join your team during that period and I am looking forward to receiving your answer.
I hope you will consider my application favourably, and I remain at your disposal for an interview at your convenience.
Yours Faithfully,
Merci par avance pour votre aide,
Je dois dire que je compte sur vous,
A bientôt j'espère,
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Modifié par bridg le 02-06-2008 19:38
Divers
Merci aux membres qui ont le gentillesse de répondre, de simplement signaler les erreurs, et de permettre au membre demandeur de s'auto corriger.
Message de popol78 posté le 02-06-2008 à 19:34:49 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
Ce serait super génial si l'on pouvait me dire ce qui ne va pas :
SUMMER JOB REQUEST
Dear Madam, sir,
With reference to your advertisement placed in … on… (date: exemple; 22nd November), I would like to apply for the position of…
I wish to apply for the post of…(intitulé du poste) as advertised in…(publication) of…(date)
I am a 22 year old student in technical skills and I am currently looking for a summer job in the UK from June 25th through August 25 th, 2008.
Mastering the English language and soaking up your culture are the principal reasons which motivate me to work with your company also I am registered in a university for an international commercial First degree.
From my experience on summer job, I have learned that a friendly contact near people and team work are very important
I am conscientious, methodical, very flexible, punctual and would consider any position you may offer me.
I would be delighted to join your team during that period and I am looking forward to receiving your answer.
I hope you will consider my application favourably, and I remain at your disposal for an interview at your convenience.
Yours Faithfully,
Merci par avance pour votre aide,
Je dois dire que je compte sur vous,
A bientôt j'espère,
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Modifié par bridg le 02-06-2008 19:38
Divers
Merci aux membres qui ont le gentillesse de répondre, de simplement signaler les erreurs, et de permettre au membre demandeur de s'auto corriger.
Réponse: popol78/Lettre de motivation de pumpkin21, postée le 06-06-2008 à 09:22:27 (S | E)
Franchement je trouve que ta lettre est pas mal du tout. Tu es précis et conscis dans tes phrases. Elle est ni trop longue ni trop courte. Mon avis serait : ne change rien, elle est très bien.
Réponse: popol78/Lettre de motivation de swan85, postée le 06-06-2008 à 22:37:59 (S | E)
22 year : année au pluriel
a university : a (manque une consonne) University commençant par une voyelle.
Réponse: popol78/Lettre de motivation de pumpkin21, postée le 07-06-2008 à 19:20:25 (S | E)
"I am a 22 year old student"
Ici, "year" ne prend pas de "s"
Par contre, si popol78 aurait écrit "I am 22 years old"
Dans ce cas ci "year" prend un "s".
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