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Message de jodimoi posté le 14-12-2009 à 10:18:26 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Je souhaiterais avoir votre avis sur ce petit exercice.
Merci encore de votre participation.
Dear Kathleen,
I introduce you to me, my name is Lina and my husband Luc we come from Nice. Do you remember of us ?
We met you on July 2008, we stayed in the hotel eight days.
You gave us a kind message, before your departure for your hometown Texas. I kept it.
I remember your kindness and your smile, I hope you are well.
My husband you wrote you last year and you didn't answer him, I hope that you'll replay me. because I would like to keep contact with you.
Best wishes
Lina
Réponse: Ecrire à une amie imaginaire de seb06000, postée le 14-12-2009 à 10:35:07 (S | E)
bonjour,
je vous indique les pistes de correction:
" Dear Kathleen,
I introduce you to me( construction du verbe à revoir) , my name is Lina and my husband Luc( il manque un petit verbe) we come from Nice. Do you remember of ( préposition inutile) us ?
We met you on July 2008, we stayed in the hotel eight days( eight days se place avant) .
You gave us a kind message, before your departure for your hometown Texas. I kept it.
I remember your kindness and your smile, I hope you are well.
My husband you wrote you (construction de to write) last year and you didn't answer him, I hope that you'll replay( voc) me. because I would like to keep contact with you.
Best wishes
Amicalement
sébastien
Réponse: Ecrire à une amie imaginaire de jodimoi, postée le 14-12-2009 à 10:52:18 (S | E)
I am introducing you to me, my name is Lina and my husband is Luc, we come from Nice. Do you remember us ?
We met you on July 2008, we stayed eight days in the hotel. You gave us a kind message, before your departure for your hometown Texas. I kept it.
I remember your kindness and your smile, I hope you are well.
My husband wrote you last year and you didn't answer him, I hope that you'll answer me. because I would like to keep contact with you.
Best wishes
Réponse: Ecrire à une amie imaginaire de laure95, postée le 14-12-2009 à 18:51:32 (S | E)
Bonsoir, voici encore quelques petites choses à corriger:
I am introducing you to me (inverser les personnes: c'est toi qui te présentes), my name is Lina and my husband is Luc, we come from Nice. Do you remember us ?
We met you on July 2008, we stayed for eight days in the hotel. You gave us a kind message, before your departure for your hometown Texas. I kept it.
I remember your kindness and your smile, I hope you are well.
My husband wrote you last year and you didn't answer him, I hope that you'll answer me. because I would like to keep contact with you.
Best wishes
Réponse: Ecrire à une amie imaginaire de violet91, postée le 14-12-2009 à 19:31:38 (S | E)
Bonsoir jodimoi..à ces conseils éclairés ,j'ajouterai :
1) Let me remind you of us.(let me introduce myself to you)
2 ) Par politesse,j'atténuerais : apparently, you didn't answer him.
3 ) you'll send me a reply.
4 To keep in touch with you.
Bon envoi.
Réponse: Ecrire à une amie imaginaire de ckmax33, postée le 14-12-2009 à 19:47:20 (S | E)
Yeah, and I'd add at the end of the letter :"I'm looking forward to hearing from you" (j'attends de vos nouvelles)
Réponse: Ecrire à une amie imaginaire de jodimoi, postée le 15-12-2009 à 08:15:29 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Je prends note de toutes vos précieuses informations.
Merci encore
Jodimoi
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