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Message de anae64 posté le 31-01-2010 à 18:07:14 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous, s'il vous plait corriger les quelques fautes qui se seraient glissées dans ma lettre?
Bonne fin de week end,
Anae

Dear Mrs Benson,

I read your recent advertisement in an English language newspaper with interest. I think I am suitable for a job in our international bookshop.

Firstly, I have a real passion for literature. Indeed, I studied English Language at “Sorbonne” during three years. Thanks to my degree, I have a general knowledge about the English literature from the middle ages to the present day. So, I think I am able to advice your customers in their reading.

Moreover, I have had my First Certificate in English (FCE) with a grade B for two years. I think that I could easily work in our international bookshop. Should you have any questions about my English register, please do not hesitate to contact me.

I would like to add that I have already worked as a waitress in a French restaurant. So, I am used to the relationship with the clientele.

Thank you in advance for your attention to my application.

Yours sincerely,
Anae XXX


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Modifié par bridg le 31-01-2010 18:07
Divers

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Réponse: Correction d'une lettre formelle de mimimi91, postée le 02-02-2010 à 14:52:00 (S | E)

je ne pense pas qu'il y a des erreurs

s:bon courage

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Réponse: Correction d'une lettre formelle de traviskidd, postée le 05-02-2010 à 07:44:12 (S | E)
Hello.

I think you mean "your" instead of "our". Otherwise it seems OK.

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Réponse: Correction d'une lettre formelle de brettdallen, postée le 05-02-2010 à 09:08:10 (S | E)
Hello,
I'd say "for three years", instead of "during", and "advice" is a noun, you need a verb! either "advise" or "give advice".
Bye.

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Réponse: Correction d'une lettre formelle de prescott, postée le 05-02-2010 à 10:02:20 (S | E)
Hello!

[Problems in red]

Dear Mrs Benson,

I read your recent advertisement in an English language newspaper with interest. I think I am suitable for a job in our international bookshop.

Firstly, I have a real passion for literature. Indeed, I studied English Language at “Sorbonne” during three years. Thanks to my degree, I have a general knowledge about the English literature from the middle ages to the present day. So, I think I am able to advice ["to assist and advise",or "to give advice to"] your customers in their reading.

Moreover, I have had my First Certificate in English (FCE) with a grade B for two years. I think that I could easily work in our international bookshop. Should you have any questions about my English register, please do not hesitate to contact me.

I would like to add that I have already worked as a waitress in a French restaurant. So, I am used to the relationship with the clientele.

Thank you in advance for your attention to my application.

Yours sincerely,

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