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Message de misterg posté le 18-04-2010 à 19:33:52 (S | E | F)
Hello everybody,

J'ai comme devoir de répondre à la question :
Where do you come from?,
mais dans une courte présentation.
Je voudrais savoir si le texte que j'ai rédigé est juste :

I come from Belfort, it is a medium-sized city which is located in East French. Belfort is near to Switzerland. This town is the second larger city of Franche-Comté after Besancon with a population of about 65 000.
Belfort is a beautiful city with a lot of flowerbed and a magnificent sculpture which represent a lion. The lion is a symbol of the city; this statue was creating by the famous architect Bartholedi the designer of Statue of Liberty. Lion dominates the historic Citadel; it is a icon to represent a victory against the Germans in the 19 century.
At 2km from Belfort, There is a basis recreational boating surround of wood. It is a quite and peaceful place. This basis allow to repose or to do sport (running, swimming, kayak etc ..)
Moreover there is a industrial centre of technology with a big industry General Electric, Alstom, Converteam and a repute engineering school.
So Belfort is a human scale city near of nature with a beautiful decor without skyscrapers.

Merci de votre aide


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Modifié par lucile83 le 18-04-2010 22:38
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Réponse: Correction/Where do you come from? de notrepere, postée le 19-04-2010 à 03:27:26 (S | E)
I come from Belfort. It is a medium-sized city which is located in East French (do you mean eastern France?). Belfort is near to Switzerland. This town is the second larger city of Franche-Comté after Besancon with a population of about 65 000.

Belfort is a beautiful city with a lot of flowerbed (un ou plus qu'un?) and a magnificent sculpture which represent (le sujet est singulier ou pluriel?) a lion. The lion is a symbol of the city. This statue was creating (au passé) by the famous architect Bartholedi the designer of (l'article défini) Statue of Liberty. (l'article défini) Lion dominates the historic Citadel; it is a (l'article indéfini avant une voyelle) icon to represent (le sujet est singulier ou pluriel?) a victory against the Germans in the 19th century.

At 2km from Belfort, there is a basis recreational boating surround of wood. It is a quite and peaceful place. This basis allow to repose or to do sport (running, swimming, kayak etc ..)

Moreover there is a (l'article indéfini avant une voyelle) industrial centre of technology with a big industry General Electric, Alstom, Converteam and a repute engineering school.

So Belfort is a human scale ?? city near of nature with a beautiful decor without skyscrapers.

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Réponse: Correction/Where do you come from? de misterg, postée le 19-04-2010 à 17:39:57 (S | E)
Merci pour l'aide donc le texte serais :

I come from Belfort. It is a medium-sized city which is located in East French. Belfort is near to Switzerland. This town is the second largest city of Franche-Comté after Besancon with a population of about 65 000.

Belfort is a beautiful city with a lot of flowerbeds and a magnificent sculpture which represents a lion. The lion is a symbol of the city. This statue was created by the famous architect Bartholedi the designer of the Statue of Liberty. the Lion dominates the historic Citadel; it is an icon to represents a victory against the Germans in the 19th century.

At 2km from Belfort, there is a basis recreational boating surround of wood. It is a silent and peaceful place. This place allow to repose or to do sport (running, swimming, kayak etc ..)

Moreover there is an industrial centre of technology with big industries General Electric, Alstom, Converteam and a repute engineering school.

So Belfort is a human scale (je veux dire une ville a taille humaine) city near of nature with a beautiful decor without skyscrapers.

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Réponse: Correction/Where do you come from? de enylewa, postée le 20-04-2010 à 13:57:30 (S | E)
coucou Belfortain ou Belfortaine

Je tombe par hasard sur ton message, et je dois dire qu'il me sera aussi très utile !
Juste une précision : pas de "e" à notre cher Bartholdi

bon courage
Enylewa

Belfortaine de naissance et de coeur,
Marseillaise depuis 1997.
xxxxx
Merci à tous

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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-04-2010 14:13
Merci de ne pas profiter d'un post d'un membre pour poser votre question.

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Réponse: Correction/Where do you come from? de irishseb, postée le 20-04-2010 à 16:22:49 (S | E)
Bonjour.Si je puis me permettre, voici ma propre correction:

"I come from Belfort. It is a medium-sized city located in Eastern France. Belfort is near Switzerland. It is the largest city in Franche-Comté after Besançon with a population of about 65,000.

Belfort is a beautiful city with a lot of flowerbeds and a magnificent sculpture which represents a lion. The lion is a symbol of the city. This statue was created by the famous architect Bartholdi,designer of the Statue of Liberty. The Lion dominates the historic citadel; it is an icon that represents a victory against the Germans in the 19th century.

Two kilometers away from Belfort, there is a recreational boating basis surrounded with woods. It is a silent and peaceful place. Here, you can have a rest or do sports (running, swimming, kayak etc ..)

Moreover, there is an industrial centre of technology with big industries (General Electric, Alstom, Converteam) and a renowned engineering school.

So Belfort is a "human scale" city near the nature with a beautiful landscape without skyscrapers."

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