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Message de kennylouis posté le 31-12-2012 à 16:23:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
J'aimerais que vous m'aidiez, s'il vous plait, à corriger mon Audition tape que mon professeur nous a donné à faire pendant les vacances. J'y ai pris du temps mais je crains qu'il reste des fautes d'expression.
Merci d'avance, et bonne fin d'année!
My name is Matthew Bieber. But when I will be a model it will be Matt, because it just sounds better. I am nineteen and I was from L.A for five years but today I live near Paris for continue my art studies.
I gratuade High School in 2009 and I was the top of my classe. I have a girlfriend for two years : her name is Katy.You must think I have a perfect life but : I have already hit rock bottom : indeed, i have lost my family one year ago during the sinking of the Costa Concordia. So I have understood the life is not a bed of roses.
That is why, my fighting spirit and me would wish participated at the tv reality America's Next Top Model Men's.
As you can see, I am not the self-centered man by excellence, I love the nature and the animals. I spend time with my dog for healing.
Otherwise, I hate video games because I find it unnecessary.
I prefer practice sports for maintain my physical.
It should be noted that I like take photographies but especially be behind the lens
I like to do anything that expresses my creative side and I think that the modeling suits me.
I love the fashion industry.
I have many pair of glasses : I think the best way if you can change your look.
I have never participated an a program of reality television.
But living in community for 2 months doesn't scare me. In general I know be friendly and kind for better deceive others.
I will tell them that the competition is too difficult for them. (hahaha)
I know I may be too eccentric sometimes but i'm also very hard-working.
I am a determined person.
I like the beautiful things.
I love do presents, I have no limits, I am very generous.
But I am not the kind of person who has to call home everyday.
Most people say that I tend to be superficial but I disagree !
I enjoy life and my friends always say I'm very optimistic!
Because I am crazy about the zen philosophy, I think meeting other people is very important in life.
A sentence summarizes my mind
« Dream so damn big that people laugh in your face. Then prove them all wrong! »
I've overcome so many hardships including the loss of my family so today I have really the envious of success.
I've been travelling for a few months in the entire world, now that's why I know that, wherever we are, whether we are rich or poor, the life is not easy.
Why should you be America's Next top model man ?
Firslty, I am not afraid to try anything. A model needs to be a product : it is therefore necessary to project an image akin to perfection. And me I embody the perfection. I will follow each of your advice. My tattoo can answer your question. Choose the difference. Choose me.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-01-2013 01:37
Message de kennylouis posté le 31-12-2012 à 16:23:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
J'aimerais que vous m'aidiez, s'il vous plait, à corriger mon Audition tape que mon professeur nous a donné à faire pendant les vacances. J'y ai pris du temps mais je crains qu'il reste des fautes d'expression.
Merci d'avance, et bonne fin d'année!
My name is Matthew Bieber. But when I will be a model it will be Matt, because it just sounds better. I am nineteen and I was from L.A for five years but today I live near Paris for continue my art studies.
I gratuade High School in 2009 and I was the top of my classe. I have a girlfriend for two years : her name is Katy.You must think I have a perfect life but : I have already hit rock bottom : indeed, i have lost my family one year ago during the sinking of the Costa Concordia. So I have understood the life is not a bed of roses.
That is why, my fighting spirit and me would wish participated at the tv reality America's Next Top Model Men's.
As you can see, I am not the self-centered man by excellence, I love the nature and the animals. I spend time with my dog for healing.
Otherwise, I hate video games because I find it unnecessary.
I prefer practice sports for maintain my physical.
It should be noted that I like take photographies but especially be behind the lens
I like to do anything that expresses my creative side and I think that the modeling suits me.
I love the fashion industry.
I have many pair of glasses : I think the best way if you can change your look.
I have never participated an a program of reality television.
But living in community for 2 months doesn't scare me. In general I know be friendly and kind for better deceive others.
I will tell them that the competition is too difficult for them. (hahaha)
I know I may be too eccentric sometimes but i'm also very hard-working.
I am a determined person.
I like the beautiful things.
I love do presents, I have no limits, I am very generous.
But I am not the kind of person who has to call home everyday.
Most people say that I tend to be superficial but I disagree !
I enjoy life and my friends always say I'm very optimistic!
Because I am crazy about the zen philosophy, I think meeting other people is very important in life.
A sentence summarizes my mind
« Dream so damn big that people laugh in your face. Then prove them all wrong! »
I've overcome so many hardships including the loss of my family so today I have really the envious of success.
I've been travelling for a few months in the entire world, now that's why I know that, wherever we are, whether we are rich or poor, the life is not easy.
Why should you be America's Next top model man ?
Firslty, I am not afraid to try anything. A model needs to be a product : it is therefore necessary to project an image akin to perfection. And me I embody the perfection. I will follow each of your advice. My tattoo can answer your question. Choose the difference. Choose me.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-01-2013 01:37
Réponse: Présentation /Correction de notrepere, postée le 01-01-2013 à 00:37:27 (S | E)
HelloMy name is Matthew Bieber. But when I will be (1) a model it will be Matt, because it just sounds better. I am nineteen and I was from L.A for five years (2) but today I live near Paris for continue (3) my art studies.
(1) temps à revoir
(2) tournure à revoir
(3) pour + infinitif ne se traduit pas comme cela en anglais
I gratuade (3) from High School in 2009 and I was the top of my classe. I have (1) a girlfriend for two years; her name is Katy. You
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