Correction/fable

Correction/fable
Message de nina96 posté le 14-01-2013 à 18:43:49 (S | E | F)
hi Hello everybody,

our teacher asked us to rewrite a fable of our choice in English version; so here's my version, and please tell me if there is any mistake.
Thanks for your answers.

"Once upon a time, there was a knight who was as bold as an egg. as he was so shy to walk with his bold hair, he decided to put on a beautiful black curly wig. One day, some lords and ladies invited him to go hunting with them. However, as he was riding his horse in the forest, his wig caught on a branch and fell in the view of everyone! they began laughing, the knight felt stupid and foolish, but at last he laughed with them, he just took it easy!"

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Modifié par nina96 le 14-01-2013 18:50

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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-01-2013 19:05

Merci de respecter les règles du site et de ne pas effacer mes corrections sur votre message, car nous tenons à une orthographe et une présentation correctes sur ce site.

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Réponse: Correction/fable de gerondif, postée le 14-01-2013 à 18:50:44 (S | E)
Hello,
I used to learn: "Charles the bold was bald": Charles le Téméraire était chauve.

our teacher asked us to rewrite a fable of our choice in english version; so here's my version, and please tell me if there is any mistake.
"Once upon a time, there was * knight who was as bold as an egg. as he was shame to walk with his bold hair, he decided to put on an beautiful black curly wig. One day, some lords and ladies invited him to go hunt(gérondif) with them. However, as he was riding his horse in the forest, his wig caught on a branch and fell in the view of (maladroit)everyone! they began (started)laughing, the knight felt himself(en trop) stupid and foolish, but at last (mauvais choix pour "pour finir", "finir par")he laughed with them, he just took it easy!"

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Réponse: Correction/fable de nina96, postée le 14-01-2013 à 18:54:11 (S | E)
Bonjour,

Once upon a time, there was a knight who was as bald as an egg. as he was so shy to walk with his bold head, he decided to put on a beautiful black curly wig. One day, some lords and ladies invited him to go hunting with them. However, as he was riding his horse in the forest, his wig caught on a branch and fell in the view of everyone! they began laughing, the knight felt stupid and foolish, but finally he laughed with them, he just took it easy!"
Thanks!

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Modifié par nina96 le 14-01-2013 18:55

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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-01-2013 19:11

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Réponse: Correction/fable de gerondif, postée le 14-01-2013 à 19:00:25 (S | E)
Hello,
as he was so shy to walk with his bold head,

(Pourquoi supprimer les corrections de la modératrice dans votre message initial ? Ah, vous aviez corrigé sur le message initial, mais dans ce cas, les lecteurs ne comprennent plus les corrections des messages 2 et suivants...)

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Réponse: Correction/fable de nina96, postée le 14-01-2013 à 19:02:04 (S | E)
okay, not bold but bald?!

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Réponse: Correction/fable de lucile83, postée le 14-01-2013 à 19:15:17 (S | E)
Hello gerondif...

bonne question, à moins que nina96 n'aime pas écrire correctement ou qu'on la corrige...Je pense que cela ne se reproduira pas.

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Réponse: Correction/fable de brettdallen, postée le 14-01-2013 à 20:06:14 (S | E)
Hello,

It's much better now, but...

Once upon a time, there was a knight who was as bald as an egg. as he was so shy to walk with his bold head, he decided to put on a beautiful black curly wig. One day, some lords and ladies invited him to go hunting with them. HoweverUnfortunately, as he was riding his horse in the forest, his wig caught on a branch and fell in the view of everyone! they began laughing, the knight felt stupid and foolish, but finally he laughed with them, he just took it easy!"

Hope this helps.

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Réponse: Correction/fable de lucile83, postée le 14-01-2013 à 20:56:16 (S | E)
nina96,

Vous ne pouvez pas corriger votre message initial mais vous devez poster votre correction dans un nouveau message, sinon tout le monde se perd entre ce qui a été incorrect, ce qui est devenu correct, ce qui ne l'est pas tout à fait...etc.
J'espère que c'est clair.

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