Correction /dialogue

Correction /dialogue
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Message de abdessamad45 posté le 10-02-2013 à 11:59:42 (S | E | F)
Bonjour

je suis en première en cours d'anglais, je dois faire un dialogue.
Le sujet est un canular donc le canular que j'ai fait c'est que je fais croire à un ami qu'il a gagné 2 millions d'euros.
Merci de corriger mes fautes.
Merci d'avance

-Cody do you remember the ticket who have buy last week?
-That I have bought in the pub behind my home
-Yes that one
-What’s wrong with it?
-You never going to believe me, we have won 2 million of dollars
-Oh my god it was amazing. It’s a dream which is realized
-We cut this amount in two. 1million each?
-No I have take all the money because I bought the ticket
-Are you serious? You quickly forget your friends
-Yes I’m very serious it is me that is scratch the card, yourself you did nothing apart watching me
-I didn't think you would do this to me
-wait a little I call my boss to inform the news
-Hello Mm Patrick I call you for tell you tomorrow I don't come to work. Because I hate you. You are the worst director that may exist in the word. You treat your employee as animals.
-No don’t do that you'll regret it.(tell the wife of Cody)
-(Cody turns to his wife to tell her)
-We finished it, I hate you I've never loved I divorce. I do not know why we got married; surely parental pressure but I hate you! When you sleep I hope you do reserve more!
-(the wife of Cody is cry )
-You need to calm you
-Not you, you'll calm, listen I have some information for you too!
-do you know that what happened on September 20
-Yes it is the day who my house have burn.it is you who burn my house?
-Yes it's me
-Oh my god I never think that you will
-now you know it
-You're a dick it was a hoax, we gain nothing.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-02-2013 14:02

Réponse: Correction /dialogue de khalil07, postée le 10-02-2013 à 14:56:43 (S | E)
~~Bsr~~ Bonsoir abdessamad45,
j'ai mis en rouge les mots qui pour moi ne sont pas corrects.

-Cody do you remember the ticket who have buy last week?(passé daté à cause de last week)
-That I have bought in the pub behind my home
-Yes that one
-What’s wrong with it?
-You never going(absence de to be pour former le present continue) to believe me, we have won 2 million of dollars
-Oh my god it was (pourquoi vous utilisez le passé? )amazing. It’s a dream which is realized
-We cut(ce verbe ne correspond pas) this amount in two. 1million each?
-No I have take(participe passé) all the money because I bought the ticket
-Are you serious? You quickly forget your friends
-Yes I’m very serious it is me(I) that(who) is scratch(participe passé) the card, yourself you did nothing apart watching me
-I didn't think you would do this to me
-wait a little I call my boss to inform(absence de pronom him/her) the news
-Hello Mm Patrick I call you for tell you tomorrow I don't(futur à cause de tomorrow) come to work. Because I hate you. You are the worst director that may exist in the word. You treat your employee(pluriel) as animals.
-No don’t do that you'll regret it.(tell the wife of Cody(utilise la possession)
-(Cody turns to his wife to tell her)
-We finished it, I hate you I've never loved(absence de pronom) I divorce. I do not know why we got married; surely (due to)parental pressure but I hate you! When you sleep I hope you do reserve more!
-(the wife of Cody is cry(present continu) )
-You need to calm you
-Not you, you'll calm, listen I have some information for you too!
-do you know that what happened on September 20
-Yes it is the day who my house have burn.it is you who burn my house?(passé)
-Yes it's me
-Oh my god I never think that you will
-now you know it
-You're a dick it was a hoax, we gain nothing.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-02-2013 18:49

Réponse: Correction /dialogue de abdessamad45, postée le 10-02-2013 à 16:54:02 (S | E)
merci Khalil07

je viens de corriger. p
Pouvez-vous me dire si c'est bon?
xxx
Merci d'avance

-Cody did you remember the ticket who bought last week?
- Whichever I bought in the pub behind my home
-Yes that one
-What’s wrong with it?
-You are never going to believe me, we have won 2 million of dollars
-Oh my god it is amazing. It’s a dream which is realized
-We share this amount on two. 1 million each?
-No I have taken all the money because I bought the ticket
-Are you serious? You quickly forget your friends
-Yes I’m very serious it is I who is scratched the card, thee you did nothing apart watching me
-I didn't think you would do this to me
-wait a little I call my boss to inform him the news
-Hello Mm Patrick I call you about tell you tomorrow I will not come to work. Because I hate you. You are the worst director that may exist in the world. You treat your staff as animals.
-No don’t do that you'll regret it.(tell Cody’s wife)
-(Cody turns to his wife to tell her)
-We finished it, I hate you I've never loved you I divorce. I do not know why we got married; surely due to parental pressure but I hate you! When you sleep I hope you do reserve more!
-(the wife of Cody is crying )
-You need to calm you
-Not you, you'll calm, listen I have some information for you too!
-do you know that what happened on September 20
-Yes it was the day how my house burning. It was you who burning my house?(passé)
-Yes it's me
-Oh my god I never thought you could do this to me
-now you know it
-You're a dick it was a hoax, we gain nothing.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-02-2013 18:51
Nous corrigeons ce que vous nous proposez, rien d'autre.

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