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Message de bilingue78 posté le 22-05-2013 à 15:25:54 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je vous serais très reconnaissant si vous eussiez la grâce de bien vouloir m'aider dans ma pénible recherche de la perfection,et cette aide précieuse pourrait en plus se manifester par quelques corrections utiles pour améliorer la qualité médiocre de mon texte, en effet je passe dans peu de lunes le superbe exercice du bac d'anglais à l'oral...
Thème: « Mythes et héros »
Heroes exist for a long time. Fictitious, as those of mythologies, or real, they are yet present today. Each book, each movie possesses a hero. They represent an ideal, they are models, and they embody values. Some people are considered like heroes on the real life too because they do extraordinary things or they promote a great message. They sometimes take place into a myth, a traditional story, concerning the early history of people or explaining a natural or social phenomenon, and typically involving supernatural beings or events. We can ask what could symbolize heroes or myth for the population.
- Heroes
Heroes exist since the Antiquity, but today some people take the dress of heroes to help people in the need, and fight against injustice and for equality. The New York Time, on an article of October, the 29th of 2007, explain us the fight of real life superheroes, in the US. According to the image of a hero, but more concretely, they help their city and its population. With a fancy dress, this anonymous troop is normal people in their life, but takes the place of a hero during action.
In “A lesson before dying”, Jefferson is a 21 man and has been sentenced to death for a murder he did not commit, and Grant Wiggins try to make Jefferson feel like more of a man. For Grant, a hero is someone who does something for other people, that other can’t do.
- Myths
In the same novel, the narrator defines what a myth is: “an old lie that people believe in”. For example, in the US, the Mother Road takes part in. This emblematic road was officially the 66 road, and pass trough Chicago to Los Angeles but was decommissioned in 1985. This road conserves a mythic character and is the most famously of the US.
Myths are frequently dreams, and takes importance with time. The American dream is still alive and symbolizes for lots of people out of the country an achievement which can change their lives, above all on this time of economical crisis. People often try every possible means to overcome hardship for reach their goal. The American dream is visible on the book “The vision of Emma Blau” (page 69): a German teen wants to join America to have a better life, this story takes place in the end of the XVIII century. This mythical subject existing on the present day, and is illustrated on the pattern (Page 67): a man explains to his children the possibility of a life in the US, a hope for better opportunities.
To conclude, heroes and myths are linked because they symbolize a hope to change the difficult life of people. Myths persist across the time, and heroes still admired, yesterday symbol of power or courage, today help people to support adversity. Literature or television do relive myths, and represent unusual person like in Iron Man 3.
Je vous manifeste mes hommages les plus respectueux si vous eussiez la grâce de m'accorder, un peu soit-il, de temps dans une relecture de mon travail.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 22-05-2013 22:30
Vous allez trop au cinéma ou vous lisez trop de livres bizarres en français
Message de bilingue78 posté le 22-05-2013 à 15:25:54 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je vous serais très reconnaissant si vous eussiez la grâce de bien vouloir m'aider dans ma pénible recherche de la perfection,et cette aide précieuse pourrait en plus se manifester par quelques corrections utiles pour améliorer la qualité médiocre de mon texte, en effet je passe dans peu de lunes le superbe exercice du bac d'anglais à l'oral...
Thème: « Mythes et héros »
Heroes exist for a long time. Fictitious, as those of mythologies, or real, they are yet present today. Each book, each movie possesses a hero. They represent an ideal, they are models, and they embody values. Some people are considered like heroes on the real life too because they do extraordinary things or they promote a great message. They sometimes take place into a myth, a traditional story, concerning the early history of people or explaining a natural or social phenomenon, and typically involving supernatural beings or events. We can ask what could symbolize heroes or myth for the population.
- Heroes
Heroes exist since the Antiquity, but today some people take the dress of heroes to help people in the need, and fight against injustice and for equality. The New York Time, on an article of October, the 29th of 2007, explain us the fight of real life superheroes, in the US. According to the image of a hero, but more concretely, they help their city and its population. With a fancy dress, this anonymous troop is normal people in their life, but takes the place of a hero during action.
In “A lesson before dying”, Jefferson is a 21 man and has been sentenced to death for a murder he did not commit, and Grant Wiggins try to make Jefferson feel like more of a man. For Grant, a hero is someone who does something for other people, that other can’t do.
- Myths
In the same novel, the narrator defines what a myth is: “an old lie that people believe in”. For example, in the US, the Mother Road takes part in. This emblematic road was officially the 66 road, and pass trough Chicago to Los Angeles but was decommissioned in 1985. This road conserves a mythic character and is the most famously of the US.
Myths are frequently dreams, and takes importance with time. The American dream is still alive and symbolizes for lots of people out of the country an achievement which can change their lives, above all on this time of economical crisis. People often try every possible means to overcome hardship for reach their goal. The American dream is visible on the book “The vision of Emma Blau” (page 69): a German teen wants to join America to have a better life, this story takes place in the end of the XVIII century. This mythical subject existing on the present day, and is illustrated on the pattern (Page 67): a man explains to his children the possibility of a life in the US, a hope for better opportunities.
To conclude, heroes and myths are linked because they symbolize a hope to change the difficult life of people. Myths persist across the time, and heroes still admired, yesterday symbol of power or courage, today help people to support adversity. Literature or television do relive myths, and represent unusual person like in Iron Man 3.
Je vous manifeste mes hommages les plus respectueux si vous eussiez la grâce de m'accorder, un peu soit-il, de temps dans une relecture de mon travail.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 22-05-2013 22:30
Vous allez trop au cinéma ou vous lisez trop de livres bizarres en français
Réponse: Oral anglais/ BAC de hushpuppy, postée le 24-05-2013 à 14:27:59 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Il y a des corrections en bleu et des conseils en vert :
Thème: « Mythes et héros »
Heroes exist(passé composé, sinon cela dit "Heroes are alive") for a long time. Fictitious, as those of mythologies, or real, they are yet(autre mot) present today. Each book, each movie possesses a hero. They represent an ideal, they are models, and they embody values. Some people are considered
- Heroes
Heroes exist(passé composé) since the Antiquity, but today some people take on the appearance of mythical heroes to help people in the need, and fight against injustice and for equality. The New York Time(orthographe), on(autre préposition) an article written on the 29th of October, 2007, explain(passé) (préposition) us the driving force of these real life superheroes who live in the US. In accordance with the image of a hero, but more concretely, they help their city and its population. With
In “A lesson before dying”, Jefferson is a 21
man and has been sentenced to death for a murder he did not commit, and Grant Wiggins try to make Jefferson feel like more of a man. For Grant, a hero is someone who does something for other people, that other can’t do.- Myths
In the same novel, the narrator defines what a myth is: “an old lie that people believe in”. For example, in the US, the Mother Road takes part in (takes part in what ?). This emblematic road was officially the 66 road, and pass(3ème personne singulier) trough(orthographe) Chicago to Los Angeles but was decommissioned in 1985. This road conserves a mythic character and is the most famously(adjective+nom) of(autre préposition) the US.
Myths are frequently dreams, and takes importance
with time. The American dream is still alive and symbolizes for lots of people out of the country an achievement which can change their lives, above all on(autre préposition) this time of economical crisis. People often try every possible means to overcome hardship for(autre préposition) reach their goal(pluriel). The American dream is visible on(autre préposition) the book “The vision of Emma Blau” (page 69): a German teen wants to join America to have a better life, this story takes place in(autre préposition) the end of the XVIII century. This mythical subject existing(3ème personne singulier au présent) on(autre préposition) the present day, and is illustrated on(autre préposition) the pattern (Page 67): a man explains to his children the possibility of a life in the US, a hope for better opportunities.To conclude, heroes and myths are linked because they symbolize a hope to change the difficult life(pluriel) of people. Myths persist across
Réponse: Oral anglais/ BAC de bilingue78, postée le 25-05-2013 à 19:00:57 (S | E)
Je vous remercie bien de votre charmante réponse,qu'elle eût satisfait mes ardeurs nouvelles pour ce langage aux aimables subtilités.Je vous prie de croire en l'expression de mes salutations les plus distinguées.
Réponse: Oral anglais/ BAC de bilingue78, postée le 25-05-2013 à 19:29:38 (S | E)
cette phrase, bien que concise, est-elle correcte, ou nécessite-t-elle des aménagements à la hauteur de mes erreurs?
Robin Hood is at the same time a hero and a myth. This legend is very famous for his heroic and courageous character. He came to poor people rescue and often risks one’s life for others. This ringleader is an icon in United Kingdom, young and old people heard of him for his achievements and his heroism. Robin Hood symbolizes the hero by excellence.
Merci bien
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-05-2013 19:34
Réponse: Oral anglais/ BAC de hushpuppy, postée le 26-05-2013 à 01:20:57 (S | E)
C'est très bien, juste un peu des corrections :
Robin Hood is a hero and a myth at the same time. This legendary figure is very famous for his heroic and courageous character. He came to rescue poor people and often risks(passé) one’s(possessif : sa vie) life for others. This ringleader is an icon in (article) United Kingdom, young and old people heard of him for his achievements and his heroism. Robin Hood symbolizes the hero by excellence.
Bonne journée
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