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Message de arwen02 posté le 01-04-2015 à 10:59:53 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un oral blanc d'anglais la semaine prochaine, quelqu'un pourrait-il corriger mon texte ci-dessous ?
Merci d'avance!
We can ask us why were superhero created ? In order to illustrate this notion, I have chosen two documents : a gallery of portraits and « Superheroes and Morality ».
In the first text there are descriptions of four superheroes : Batman, Superman, Captain America and Spiderman. There would be all Marvel Comic’s creations. These superheroes have powers, like climb walls, fly, an oustanding strenght, etc. They are models of the good and there are in accord with their morals. Theys save people and that’s why majority of us admirate them. Superheroes have generally a sad back story : for example, Batman’s parents have been killed. It inspire compassion to the public and make him more attractive. Heroes make us dream, they send us in a other world and it that way there are essential to the society. They incarn values and give the example to the future generations.
The second text was written by Robin Rosenberg, a psychologist. She was born in 1962, and she is a United States District Judge. Adulthood affect his views on comics in the fact which she saw a psychologic side in Marvel’s comics. The writer base his analysis on Batman because he is the typical model of the « psychologic hero ». He give a moral : he struggled to make meaning of his traumatical experience becoming a hero, like the majority of shell-shocked persons. What’s more, in his foibles, struggles and triumphs we can see elements of our own foibles struggles and triumphs. He inspire hope when we are not sure of ourselves, and it’s essential in a society that is deprived of common sense. These superheroes could have participated to the good mental health of soldier during the war for example, they showed them that nothing was never lost and that we don’t have to throw in the sponge. They symbolize the american power too and how the liberty is important, it motivate people to defend their country.
To conclude, superheroes are very important in the common opinion : they influence a lot the population, and it’s benefic in a war time, and to learn values to young people. It’s a sort of propagand, but bottom ideas are crucial morals pinciples to the good developpement of a society.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-04-2015 11:03
Message de arwen02 posté le 01-04-2015 à 10:59:53 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un oral blanc d'anglais la semaine prochaine, quelqu'un pourrait-il corriger mon texte ci-dessous ?
Merci d'avance!
We can ask us why were superhero created ? In order to illustrate this notion, I have chosen two documents : a gallery of portraits and « Superheroes and Morality ».
In the first text there are descriptions of four superheroes : Batman, Superman, Captain America and Spiderman. There would be all Marvel Comic’s creations. These superheroes have powers, like climb walls, fly, an oustanding strenght, etc. They are models of the good and there are in accord with their morals. Theys save people and that’s why majority of us admirate them. Superheroes have generally a sad back story : for example, Batman’s parents have been killed. It inspire compassion to the public and make him more attractive. Heroes make us dream, they send us in a other world and it that way there are essential to the society. They incarn values and give the example to the future generations.
The second text was written by Robin Rosenberg, a psychologist. She was born in 1962, and she is a United States District Judge. Adulthood affect his views on comics in the fact which she saw a psychologic side in Marvel’s comics. The writer base his analysis on Batman because he is the typical model of the « psychologic hero ». He give a moral : he struggled to make meaning of his traumatical experience becoming a hero, like the majority of shell-shocked persons. What’s more, in his foibles, struggles and triumphs we can see elements of our own foibles struggles and triumphs. He inspire hope when we are not sure of ourselves, and it’s essential in a society that is deprived of common sense. These superheroes could have participated to the good mental health of soldier during the war for example, they showed them that nothing was never lost and that we don’t have to throw in the sponge. They symbolize the american power too and how the liberty is important, it motivate people to defend their country.
To conclude, superheroes are very important in the common opinion : they influence a lot the population, and it’s benefic in a war time, and to learn values to young people. It’s a sort of propagand, but bottom ideas are crucial morals pinciples to the good developpement of a society.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-04-2015 11:03
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